My Classmate Hobby
Sih Wahyundari is my classmate, she has lot of hobbies. They are watching,cooking,listening to the music and swimming. And the most hobby that she likes is watching Korean drama especially City Hunter and Boys Before Flower. Because she likes the story and there is Lee Min Hoo as her favourite idol. It can makes relaxed for awhile.Then, she likes collected all about Korea such as pictures of Lee Min Hoo. That is short story about my classmate hobby.
I have an opinion about your writing in the sentence: "Then, she likes collected all about Korea...". You have to change the word 'collected' became 'collecting'.
BalasHapusHi Wiwiet...
BalasHapusI think that the title should be "My Classmate's Hobby" because the story tells about Ari's hobby (possession).
Then, I think the sentence: "It can makes relaxed for awhile." It should be,"It can make ......" because modals verb is followed by V1.
@Heflin:You are right!
BalasHapus